Thread:Nikiduke/@comment-26108027-20181023200808

We need to have a chat about your character, Tom.

The universe I have set up has reverted everyone to "human" forms.

So far, you have defied that rule at every turn. You constantly mention either how Tom is undead or wants to kill himself, with little else to fill him out.

I've put far too much work into this to see you constantly ruin the immersion by saying things like:

"Tom drinks his water which he doesnt require"

"Tom doesnt react to any of this"

"Having no sense of smell Tom simply walks in and looks for a table."

These examples are only from Part 2.

I will applaud you on the concept, but your delivery just... falls short. Tom is a static character. He has no room for development with the path you're currently on, and he's just sort of... boring.

Your replies are also short. Most are short sentences that lack punctuation.

You need to add more detail to your replies. I also struggle with this issue, and I've found that everyone suffers when you don't type a long enough reply.

I'm coming from a position of professional concern, and I hope you change your behavior. Thank you. 